Sunday, May 3, 2009

The Importance of Revision; Influenced by Bruce Springsteen's Revision Examples

Erica Morrow
111-28-Diagnostic
January 21, 2009
Fun-filled ways of Escaping Parents
People will tell you running away from your parents does not solve anything. They’re right, but it does aid in alleviating turmoilous situations; especially when you’re underage. Parents act unreasonable and sometimes you long to escape their tyranny, even for one day. I know how you feel and I’m about to tell you how I achieved that same thought.
Two years ago things weren’t looking good for my relationship with my parents.I felt like an unbroken horse with a fat person on my back. I needed to escape, so thought of a destination where my parents could never find me. My secret spot: The Eastern Shore. I stopped to fill my gas tank and crossed the Chesapeake Bay Bridge headed for lands unknown. After traveling the 17.6 mile-long bridge, I headed north-bound on highway 13 which takes you towards Cape Charles. The drive was relieving and there was nothing in sight with the exception of ancient, rotted-out houses and the occasional convenient store for fire works and cheap tobacco.
After an hour and a half of traveling and a sore buttocks, I visited Kiptopeke State Park in Cape Charles, Virginia. Naturally astounded by my surroundings, I decided to investigate the parks’ natural beauty. Automatically I hit the beach, and as I wondered off I noticed historic concrete ships baracading the shore. I later learned that nine concrete ships were made during the second world war and were half sunken to act as a ferry
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breakwater for the shore! Leaving the beach, I climbed 2 flights of wooden steps leading to the forest section of the park. It was such a wonderful sight with massive trees reaching towards the sun. I also noticed structures in the woods called yurts that looked like tents and cabins combined. These yurts were modernly equipped and interpreted from our ancient nomadic ancestors, and nothing like I had ever seen. The yurts gave the Park a more earthy feeling, unlike most other industrialized parks.
They day was winding down and I had to head home before dark. I left Kiptopeke State Park in all its glory, crossed back over the Chesapeake Bay Bridge and stopped at my friends’ house for bong rips before returning to the twilight zone, which I call my house. While I was at my friends’ house my mother left a message on my cell phone for me to be home by 8 o’clock or the police would be sent after me. The thought of my parents being angry with me was scary, but involving the police was another ball game that I wasn’t intending to play.
All good things must end, so I arrived home at 8 o’clock sharp to find my parents in complete rage. I had to listen to lectures, say my apologies, and cry in despair at the thought of my punishment. Even though I received a month of confinement, I had the best road trip ever and nobody will ever take away those memories. Taking that road trip to the Eastern Shore didn’t solve any of my issues, but it did alleviate my internal turmoil and the turmoil my parents faced with me as their daughter.



Erica Morrow
111-28-Revised Diagnostic
5 March 2009
The Run Policy
Running from your parent(s) is wrong, but sometimes it is liberating. In my experiences with running I’ve come up with a simple, yet effective plan: Create probable reason, find a remote or random location, and wait for the smoke to clear. This plan not only gives time for the accused to gather their thoughts, but it also gives the parent(s) a chance to reflect and strategize as well. This strategy is most effective with teenagers age 14 to 17.
Ladies, Gentlemen, I’ve been down that road over-grown with weeds. The road often less taken is filled with question, curiosity, and excitement (not to mention the consequences that followed when entangled by thorny bushes). The rush of excitement motivates me to continue my journey through the weeds.
My first encounter with thorny bushes held me at age eight. In school they taught of America, the nation of democracy, and freedom of speech and opinion. At home it was a nation controlled by a dictatorship; the mother and father rule the house and anyone in it. Most of the time thoughts of any place were better than thoughts of staying home. I yearned for the open road and making my own decisions; plus I was hurt emotionally by my folks and considered my friends loyal and trustworthy. Like a hobo with a few belongings slung over my shoulder, I proceeded to jump the chain-link fence and head for streets unknown, literally.
My plans were foiled when my elderly neighbor, Hank, spotted me unattended and decided to be nosy. “What are you doing,” he asked with compassion and concern in his voice. I told him I was leaving my house, never coming back, and stood firm with my decision. After a moment of conversation and reasoning, I agreed to let him walk me back home. I wish I could have stayed away from the territory of the house because my parents didn’t take Hank’s news very well. My mother got emotional and angry, as did my father. The consequences were isolation to my sleeping quarters for a few weeks. It was dreadful because my favorite pastime is enjoying the outdoors and friends. After taking that detour through decrepit thorny bushes, I stuck to pavement because it’s smoother with much less conflicts.
I sucked up the punishment and continued to live in oppression until my next outbreak, which happened to occur eight years later. High school changes a person’s perspective on life; it can also change a person. The single-most person responsible for my interactions with drugs, alcohol, and rebelliousness is my high school sweetheart. Most of the activities that involved him also involved me, and love makes you do crazy things, so I was down.
Once again the oppression I felt from my parents’ dictatorship roles became unbearable. They were ruining my social and personal life; not only with my sister whom I continue to fight with, but also with my high school sweetheart. I felt like a trapped animal desperately clawing its way out and needing to taste freedom. This is when the Run Policy was created. Assessing the situation is the first step. Identifying the attacker and reasons of the flight reaction is the second step. Making it seem as though my parents were out-stepping their boundaries made it easier for me to decide on taking my second and last attempt for freedom. I chose the Eastern Shore for my most random and secluded location kidnapped my sweetheart and booked it towards the Chesapeake Bay Bridge for the day. I also turned my cell phone off so I was unreachable all day to ensure my plan’s success. It was coincidentally the Fourth of July, so I wanted to make sure I got my eight hours of freedom because I foresaw consequences.
My trip was an ultimate success, it was uplifting and exciting because I was 16, on my own with a car, and all the time in the world to scavenge around. It gave me a chance to escape and reflect on aspects of my life. It was also a trip of experience followed by conversations of deeply-rooted problems within the family and my punishment. I know it gave my parents time to think about their actions towards me, and how they act towards other in general, because when I returned home that night the family had a discussion. It included talk of sources to our internal problems, and issues we had between each other and how to improve our quality of living at home.
Today my family has meetings every month, because all four of us lead busy lives and we hardly see each other. Three years down the road and I still cut through thorny weeds in my path. The only difference now is that I identify and conquer my afflictions before they become as annoying as a hemorrhoid. Take it from me. It is better to tackle weeds because when you directly face your initial problems, you can solve them more effectively.

1 comment:

  1. I thought it said "Rum Policy" at first.

    I like how you relate the Boss' ideas of running away with your own.

    Take hold...

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